Happy
You make me happy,
Something I didn't think I could be,
You laugh at my jokes,
Blow off my insercurities,
Challenge my beliefs,
Force me to learn,
Cherish my quirks,
Trained me to forgive,
Encourage my dreams,
Even when they are stupid,
You let me be myself,
You love me exactly how I am,
Put up with all the embarassment I cause,
And comfort me whenever i'm down,
You make me feel wonderful,
You love me,
You make me feel so happy,
Thanks.
posted by Ophelia @ 8:46 PM
1 Comments:
I thought this was sincere and authentic. In the spirit of constructive criticism, it is almost entirely "telling" which leads to vagueness. When you write "I am happy or embarrased or loved" this means different things to every reader, and therefore ends up not meaning much of anything. Consider deeply exploring one or two of these concepts and "showing" the reader your particular understanding of it.
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